T.O.P.'s Tuesday: The 1st Read of a WIP

Does my photo let you know how the first read by an avid fiction reader went of my work-in-progress (WIP)? Actually it wasn't as bad as one might think when you see a picture of me going up in flames yet for this author and newbie fiction writer, it was a challenge.

Here are a few truths I knew before entrusting this to my daughter:
1) It's my 1st attempt at fiction
2) It's a 1st Draft

So basically, I know it wasn't ready but I knew she'd be honest and let me know if it was worth pursuing or to file it and go back to nonfiction.

Overall she liked it but said, "You haven't shared this with anyone else yet, right?" 

Ouch, was my heart but the words that came out, "No, it's a first draft, you are the only one. If it's bad, just tell me." My tone must have matched my heart.

Her response, priceless, "Relax, I was just asking. You are the editor for me, just didn't know if anyone else had looked at it."

"Nope, only trusted you so far.", no more comments after that. 

I told her to write on it and share any thoughts. Her feedback is insightful and honest. Now to decide if I go back and work on a couple of these or keep moving forward or pause for a little editing and revision.

Areas Noted:
1) Switch from 1st to 3rd person in the beginning (I knew this but only noted it as something to fix later, when I started I wasn't sure the direction - she encouraged me to fix this now)
2) It's a little disconnected at parts, if a chapter was moved to a different spot, it would flow better
3) You left your phone home but then later in the book you have your phone, "Where did the phone come from? LOL"
4) times vary from perspective
5) Time frames need work
6) "I'll read it when it's done, you have work to do before it goes to the editor."

I love this kid of mine and her honesty. She noted other items too, things I struggled with and even put question marks by paragraphs with a note like, "What? Unclear.", these were paragraphs I couldn't get right so just moved on. I value her ability to read and respond as a reader, a lover of books. Her insight and questions will help me as I make changes and move forward with this project.

I look forward to getting back to my writer's cottage for a day or two of writing. I planned to this past weekend but as with life, plans changed and life happened. Instead of writing, I was where I needed to be but because of this time, my daughter had the opportunity to read and offer her feedback, so it wasn't a complete writing loss.

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Do these comments make you
curious to what I'm writing?
​What are hoping to read?

I might be putting this on hold
yet it's still running through my brain...